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The Cyfecti

Post by Uriel on Sun Jul 05, 2015 7:43 pm

Major update to the Cyfecti here: http://1d4chan.org/wiki/Cyfecti

Read and review here.
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Re: The Cyfecti

Post by Lumey on Sat Aug 01, 2015 1:54 am

The Cyfecti page needs some kind of introduction section briefly setting out what they are, what interests they promote, and their general disposition in the Galaxy. Otherwise the reader has no idea why they're reading! cat

I get that these guys are another bioweapon of the Old Ones and that's cool. Did their lack of society come about through their fall to Chaos, or were they always individualistic?

A couple of issues really stand out. The physical appearance section uses variations on the phrase "similar to humans" far too frequently. The section "The Cold Wind" needs more explanation before substantial critique.
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Re: The Cyfecti

Post by Uriel on Mon Aug 03, 2015 12:29 am

Thanks for reading it, I'll give it a fix up when I can. I feel a dolt for forgetting to add the intro paragraph...

I felt I'd leave it open if they were another "Old Ones creation", meaning they could just be a minor race who gets into a position of relative influence in the galaxy. And their independence is meant to be a cultural thing, before they interact with chaos, though I suppose the argument that Tzeentch was guiding them to him and the other gods the whole time is not that hard to make.

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